I really enjoyed reading through this—there was a good balance between Arsene Lupin-as-player-character and Arsene-Lupin-as-his-own-man; I had influence over him, but never so much that we lost sight of the man himself. It's a fun romp throughout; it's clear that you had a ton of fun writing this as you went.
My major is that, as I was playing, I think I ran afoul of just about every dead end, both the "try again" screens and the ones that were unfinished. For the latter, I'd recommend narrowing down the list of options: if you need to get to the laundry room, for example, I'd have every option loop back that way, somehow. As-is, there are too many branches, it's not surprising at all that you ran out of time.
For the former, the "try again" screens, I'd either cut them entirely (maybe just have "better" or "worse" options), or else gamify it even further. If you make it clear how and why I'm failing as player—like, say, if I choose Arsene's particular areas of focus early on, and then have options to use those to the maximum or not—it will feel significantly better than just "you chose wrong." As-is, it feels sort of arbitrary and needlessly punishing; in some twine games that can work, but here, as Arsene Lupin, bursting with panache and grace, it feels very off.
Despite those dead ends, I still really enjoyed playing through your piece. Nice work!
This was such a fun jaunt!! I could tell you had a ton of fun writing this. You have a great command of tone and a great sense of humor and it really shows!! I always picked the most wild options, thinking they wouldn't work, but was pleasantly surprised to find that they worked! Really loved being Arsene Lupin, the narration really sold it for me.
The only real criticism I have is that stark white on stark black gave me a little bit of eye strain, and I would've preferred a dark blue, but otherwise this was great! Good job!!
"You grab another tray of food (can you even call it that?) "
amazing, spectacular. . . .
again, this really reminds me of the absurdist humor of jail break. I love how a lot of logic still stays within the world of arsene lupin, and it just has a lot of slapstick shenagains within. It's so much fun to wonder what choices lead to what outcomes, and I'd love to see what would happen in the peeing route alone. Wonderful job!! take a break :]
This really felt like I'm the Lupin lol. I finished this game kind of quick but I had to try again several times in some passages. It kinda felt like I had to choose the options most disgusting or dirty where the guards won't look, or do stuff that is really out of ordinary to progress which all felt fun! The dribbling part and peeing my pants part cracked me lol.
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I really enjoyed reading through this—there was a good balance between Arsene Lupin-as-player-character and Arsene-Lupin-as-his-own-man; I had influence over him, but never so much that we lost sight of the man himself. It's a fun romp throughout; it's clear that you had a ton of fun writing this as you went.
My major is that, as I was playing, I think I ran afoul of just about every dead end, both the "try again" screens and the ones that were unfinished. For the latter, I'd recommend narrowing down the list of options: if you need to get to the laundry room, for example, I'd have every option loop back that way, somehow. As-is, there are too many branches, it's not surprising at all that you ran out of time.
For the former, the "try again" screens, I'd either cut them entirely (maybe just have "better" or "worse" options), or else gamify it even further. If you make it clear how and why I'm failing as player—like, say, if I choose Arsene's particular areas of focus early on, and then have options to use those to the maximum or not—it will feel significantly better than just "you chose wrong." As-is, it feels sort of arbitrary and needlessly punishing; in some twine games that can work, but here, as Arsene Lupin, bursting with panache and grace, it feels very off.
Despite those dead ends, I still really enjoyed playing through your piece. Nice work!
This was such a fun jaunt!! I could tell you had a ton of fun writing this. You have a great command of tone and a great sense of humor and it really shows!! I always picked the most wild options, thinking they wouldn't work, but was pleasantly surprised to find that they worked! Really loved being Arsene Lupin, the narration really sold it for me.
The only real criticism I have is that stark white on stark black gave me a little bit of eye strain, and I would've preferred a dark blue, but otherwise this was great! Good job!!
"You grab another tray of food (can you even call it that?) "
amazing, spectacular. . . .
again, this really reminds me of the absurdist humor of jail break. I love how a lot of logic still stays within the world of arsene lupin, and it just has a lot of slapstick shenagains within. It's so much fun to wonder what choices lead to what outcomes, and I'd love to see what would happen in the peeing route alone.
Wonderful job!! take a break :]
This really felt like I'm the Lupin lol. I finished this game kind of quick but I had to try again several times in some passages. It kinda felt like I had to choose the options most disgusting or dirty where the guards won't look, or do stuff that is really out of ordinary to progress which all felt fun! The dribbling part and peeing my pants part cracked me lol.